69novels Chapter 120: The Inspired Senior Sister
Chapter 120: The Inspired Senior Sister
After changing her view on Gaoban You Ye, Kasumigaoka Shiyu felt that he was not so annoying.
Thinking of the purpose of coming here, she couldn't help but said to him.
"Gaoban-kun, you wrote a light novel, right? Can you show it to me?"
This was a bit abrupt, so after asking this question, Kasumigaoka Shiyu felt a little uneasy.
The girl subconsciously peeked at his face, and her little hands tightened on the sofa beneath her.
"sure."
Gao Ban You Ye smiled and handed her the small bag next to him.
"However, Kasumigaoka-senpai said that she is also here to meet Miss Machida Enko, so am I lucky enough to be able to read your masterpiece?"
"Okay. Then let's swap."
Kasumigaoka Shiyu laughed.
This smile is like a hundred flowers blooming, making the surrounding scenery eclipse.
The few who were looking at her secretly didn't even notice that the food in their hands was stuffed into their nostrils, they were so absorbed in the smile that they couldn't help themselves.
Subsequently.
Kasumigaoka Shiyu also opened her bag, took out the manuscript, and handed it to him.
Reciprocity is a courtesy.
He was so generous in showing him the unpublished manuscript, so of course she had to show her appreciation.
"This is...the unpublished second volume of "Metronome of Love"!"
Gaoban You Ye pretended to be shocked, "So, Kasumigaoka-senpai, you are the author of "230 Love Metronome"! I am so lucky today, please be sure to give me your autograph."
"Uh...are you a fan of my books?"
Seeing him so excited, Kasumigaoka Shiyu blushed a little, and felt an indescribable feeling in her heart.
In this regard, Fu Ban You Ye said excitedly.
"Of course. It wasn't that guy An Yilun who recommended this book "Metronome of Love" to me. I became hooked after reading it."
"Moreover, the heroine Sayuka in the book was probably drawn by my senior sister according to her own character! I thought you looked a bit familiar, and now I finally know what's going on!"
"And that guy An Yilun, after giving me the first volume, he didn't give me the second volume, which made me wait hard.
"But now it's better. You, the author, sent it directly. How lucky you are!"
Kasumigaoka Shiu's writing style is definitely a breath of fresh air in the light novel world, and one can't help but admire it.
Anyway, Gaoban You Ye feels that her writing is definitely not as good as hers.
"You're flattered, Mr. Gaoban."
Kasumigaoka Shiyu's pretty face turned red, "I haven't decided whether to publish this second volume yet. I just brought it here for the editor to review today."
"Anyway, it would be great if you could give me some advice as a reader after reading it."
"Okay (bfcb), no problem!"
Gao Ban You Ye nodded, immediately opened her manuscript and started reading.
He reads very quickly, so a few minutes passed and he had already finished the second volume.
but.
After reading it, he frowned.
It's not as exciting as the first volume at all. It's full of empty candy and has no technical content at all.
Especially the plot aspect.
It has reached a point where even Kasumigaoka Shiu's amazing writing style cannot be changed.
Too boring.
So empty.
Put it this way.
The first volume is the process of the heroine Sayuka and the hero meeting, getting to know each other, and falling in love.
In the second volume, there is still the incident of two people falling in love and spreading dog food.
But this episode seems boring and not as compelling as the first volume.
at this time.
Kasumigaoka Shiyu is also reading his novel.
After reading a few chapters, her eyes lit up.
How can an adventure novel about a demon king and a brave man be like this?
This is the first time she has met the Demon King. It is a decent novel, the plot is also very compact, and the heroine makes people can't help but sympathize and want to pity her.
This is completely a master-level masterpiece!
No wonder Machida Enko signed it.
By the time Kasumigaoka Shiyu came to her senses, she had finished reading the second volume.
"Well, I'm sorry, Mr. Gaoban, it's obviously not published yet, but I also read the second volume..."
Kasumigaoka Shiyu was a little embarrassed.
"It doesn't matter, why don't you show me the second volume too?"
Gao Ban You Ye smiled, and the next second, he said seriously.
"However, Kasumigaoka-senpai, your second volume is very problematic."
"Can you tell me more about it?"
Hearing this, Kasumigaoka Shiyu quickly sat up and looked at him expectantly.
After reading the book he wrote, she completely trusted his reviews.
Gao Ban You Ye nodded.
"sure."
"First of all, I only have one feeling after reading your second volume. It's not sweet enough, it's too empty, and it doesn't have the feeling of the first volume at all."
"Especially this section, the section where Sayuka celebrates the male protagonist's birthday, is already available in the first volume, right? Although the gift is changed, there is nothing new."
"The first volume has almost covered the story of love. There is absolutely no need to go over it again. It would be boring to overdo it.
"Besides, after writing the second volume, it's still these two people. Why don't you add another female character, senior?"
"Do you know about the love triangle? Add an opponent to the heroine, such as a tsundere childhood sweetheart or something, and make the relationship between the hero and Sayuka in the second volume more twists and turns, including a car accident..."
Listening to Gao Ban You Ye's words, Kasumigaoka Shiyu was originally very dissatisfied.
After all, if the work that you have worked so hard to write is rejected, you will definitely feel uncomfortable, especially since the high-ranking You Ye is not an editor.
But after hearing the end, Kasumigaoka Shiyu's eyes lit up completely.
She finally knew what her shortcomings were in Volume 2.
As Gao Ban You Ye said, the characters are too single and she has never thought about setting up new characters to join!
After hearing what he said, the girl was suddenly inspired.
"Thank you, Mr. Gaoban, I understand what I want to write! I have something else to do, so I will leave first. Sister Yuanzi will come later. You tell her that I have gone to revise the manuscript! Goodbye!"
Before Gao Ban You Ye could react, Kasumigaoka Shiyu picked up her manuscript and left in a hurry.
Look.
She can't wait to code words and describe new plots.
"Xiao Shi, let me come...ah, where are you going?"
Coincidentally, Machida Enzi arrived here at this moment.
But Kasumigaoka Shiyu couldn't wait any longer, so he said hello to her, turned around and ran away.
She's going back to coding.
"what's the situation?"
Machida Enzi looked confused and a little confused.
"Hello, you are Miss Machida Enko. I am the "Ye Da Demon King". Just now, Kasumigaoka-senpai thought of a good idea, so she hurriedly went back to revise the manuscript."
Gao Ban You Ye stood up and greeted her.
"Are you [Ye Da Mo Wang]?"
Seeing the young and handsome Gaoban You Ye in front of her, Machida Enzi opened her mouth in surprise.
After reading his manuscript, she thought he was a fat nerd.
and......
"Your name is Senior Sister Xiaoshi, does it mean that you are a junior younger than her?"
Is it so easy for talented writers to appear now?
"Yes, my real name is Takaita You Ye, and I am a first-year student at Sobu High School.
"Well... Anyway, let's sit down first."
Machida Enzi sighed and sat opposite him.
Immediately afterwards.
The two started talking about signing the contract.
Finally, Gao Ban You Ye also showed her the second volume and signed a contract. Today's task is over.
Next.
All he had to do was hand the third volume to her on a special occasion and wait for the reward.
And the other side.
The otaku girl exchange meeting has also come to an end. .